Blame it on Chuck Wendig and his flash fiction challenge!
Fine. Don't blame him, he just gave me the idea -- and if you wish to blame someone, blame me for clumsy writing.
Anyway, you can read about the challenge here (basically, pick one of the 6 possible settings, and write a story around it in no more than 1000 words), and here's what I came up with:
The Bone
Cathedral
“Honey, I really think you should talk
to him. I know that some boys torture bugs, but this is freaking me out.”
“I’ll take care of it.”
*
“Son, this is... Impressive.”
“It’s just a model.”
“A model?”
“Yes, it’s tiny. No real people could
get in to pray. I just wanted to see if I could do it. If I could make it so it
would stand.”
“So, it was a one-time thing? Well, you
certainly made it. Where did you get all those little bones?”
“Mice and rats.”
“Live mice and rats? How did you...?”
“Well, they’re not alive anymore. And
Mrs. Smith is no longer complaining about mice in her kitchen.”
“But how did you... Oh, never mind, once
you set your mind to something, you do it. But tell me, why bones? You little
cathedral is impressive, but why didn’t you just use matches or something?”
“Because we’re all made of bones. We
should pray among the bones.”
“What... Oh. I didn’t think that seeing
that Roentgen photography of your brother’s leg would upset you so much.”
“It didn’t upset me.”
“Well, did you pray for his fast
recovery?”
“I told you, it’s a model. It’s too
little. I’d need bigger bones for a real one.”
“We don’t have to pray among the bones,
and besides, we’re not made just of bones, we’re also flesh and blood and
nerves and other stuff.”
“But when we die, isn’t it bones that
remain?”
“After a while, yes. But after some more
time, there’s only dust.”
“At the end, we’re dust? Like, after a
fire, when everything burns?”
“Something like that, yes.”
“Oh.”
*
“Honey, when I said you should talk to
him, I didn’t mean that you should give him more ideas.”
8 comments:
LOL. I love it!
Creepy. Nice job!
'We are all made of bones ...' loved that!
Seriously creepy! Well done! :)
Kelly, Karen, Claudine, Samantha, glad you all enjoyed!
Great! I clicked on the link in your Terrible Minds post cos of the all dialogue story, I liked the idea, and then I liked your premise even better. 'I'd need bigger bones for a real one.' - class!
So glad you enjoyed it!
Love it!
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